There is a God. I have seen him snap the necks
Of children and inspect their hollow remains.
Pushing past the sinews, there is nothing there.
No prayers clogging the arteries, stopping the rush
Of blood, a blackened jet.
Their mouths had not yet learnt how to
Form 'hail mary's'. Tongues twisted at the sound.
The syllables choke.
There is no use lying to a child who when asking
For God, finds only silence.
He is not interested in them. The purity sickens.
There's a boredom in innocence that causes him
To turn away. His eyes are better fixed on those
Who can praise him. The shallow whore who never
Thought her life would take this path. Legs opening
To receive the golden coins that her greed is attracted to.
The eternal magpie offerers up her soul, asks for
Deliverance, and God, being the greediest of all, basks
In her devotion.
This is worth listening to. Each prayer a pearl that he counts.
His own personal rosary. Saved this one, heard another.
He doesn't think about the thousands who don't know where to
Put their faith.
Children suffer eternally for their silence.
God suffers none for his.















Critiques
This is not the flattering of some ill-advised onlooker.
Every line is like a nettle to the readers mind. Every scene and every syllable is the beginning and end of a great story, whose content might be twisted as wicked as He; but is fixed to the ones who know and truly see.
Nothing I can bend in this poem to critique. The message is that potent. You were able to show the signs to the child within some who have read this, couldn’t back then – signs I never dreamed of seeing until now. It has been an honor to read and see them.
Truly, this is a well-written poem!
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